We beginning writers are constantly told to "show" more than "tell" more. I struggle with "showing" versus "telling" in my stories sometimes. Today I'm going to work on an exercise that takes a plain old boring passage that "tells" what happened and attempt to improve upon it by "showing" what happened.
Let's try this one for an example:
"It was an old Ford car" and change it like this, "The metallic blue Ford sedan had Wyoming license plates, tinted windows and a dent in the right rear fender."
Is this an improvement?
Here's another one:
"She was a plain looking woman" and change it to, "Wearing blue jeans and a white t-shirt that showed her midriff, Josephine tied her shoulder length hair back in a pony-tail."
You're welcome to post your version of this exercise by clicking on the comments link below.